Technology Essay
Framing Statement
Throughout the past few weeks, I personally think that I am improving my writing skills. With the first essay I had written, I had trouble connecting my ideas with the assigned text. The reason for this was because I would write things that would make sense in my head, however, the reader did not understand my connection to it. For this essay, I made sure that the ideas I wanted to express was done so that it is clear. I also reread my essay out loud, which helped, because it allowed me to find sentences that did not make sense or did not flow with the essay. The suggestions of my peers helped as well, they gave me a chance to revise things that I was missing. Personally, I think that this essay is an improvement from the previous essay, because I slowed down and made sure everything was elaborated the way I wanted to. Compared to the previous essay, also believe that my essay is much more clear to the reader. With the first essay, everything was vague, which caused me to slow down and reread my essay more carefully. Overall, I am improving my writing skills, but there are more skills to be learned throughout the next few weeks.
Revisions
For this essay, I think I was able to make my thesis clear and kept that theme going throughout my essay. However, there are still revisions to be made for this essay. Some examples of what I need to improve are emphasizing the importance of what I am trying to express and elaborating some of the quotes better. In order to improve these faults, I want to reread my essay to make sure that the essay flows, add urgency to my writing, and try to elaborate on the quotes. Overall, the comments that were made by my peer have come to be helpful in the process of revising my essay.
Happiness Essay
Framing Statement
English has never been one of my strengths and it was never a class I looked forward to, because of my ‘lack of ability to write’. Writing has always given me trouble, I always felt like I am writing in the wrong format, or I am quoting incorrectly. However, throughout this essay I feel like I have improved since my last essay in highschool. A strength that I have developed is being able to write a good introduction. During highschool, I felt like my introduction never really caught the attention of the reader. Although, I feel that the introduction for this essay was good. A weakness that I have throughout the revision portion of this essay was being able to elaborate the quotes. Following the quotes are an elaboration on the quote, but I felt like there are parts where the quote was not interpreted exactly how my mind wanted. Overall, I would say that this essay might be one of the best essays, because of the time that was used for revisions in class.
